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对仗非常工整,律诗关键就是对仗,起句点题,首尾相接,构思不错,新意还行吧,因为大多数都是这样吧,夸老师的词,都是桃李满天下,整首很高,夕阳一句,最后结尾也不错,夕阳也是代表岁老,更年,老师的付出得....
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