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重尘 发表于 2020-9-30 18:57
浣溪沙*秋
重尘
人世几多十八秋?为词秒秒有新愁,不完作业大锤筹。
题目是秋,填词和秋好像联系不上吧。过片能按照要求对仗,很不错。只是上下片有些脱节。整体构架、用词还需细
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