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古典联十一清新组第十九讲作业(点评老师—瓶子) |
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一联还行,二联明月不行,失对失替
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一联还行,二联前四不太好,有点凑
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有点凑了,露落读来拗口,二联前四后三关联不是太好
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对得不错,联意有流转,继续努力
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还不错,继续努力
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