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问好暖阳学友;整首脉络清晰,双结句做到了1领4句式赞!(风笛劲吹情曲,却无人相伴。)劲吹,风力有点过大。可酌。其他尚好,继续保持吆!
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问好修竹学友·;第三意群得字出律!且记双结1领4字句,以仄平平平仄为妙!注意四个意群之间的衔接。预祝学习愉快!
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