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古典诗十四期五律十九讲冬组作业贴: |
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问好,五律对水仙的形神描写比较好,举字可酌
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问好,此诗起承转合安排的不错,也比较符合水仙的特点,需要商榷:六出代指雪花,结句的只恐有不确定的意思,如果能换个确定意思的词收束的会更有力,个见
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